On a blanket, Under the stars

Improved! Also, half this poem (everything "she" goes through) is based on some life experiences... so this is a very personal poem for me. Honestly, I wrote it for me more than anything else. But I hope you enjoy it nonetheless.


Under the stars, on a blanket they lay.
As they watch the setting sun,
they simply enjoy each others' company.
Better places to be, there are none.

She smiles softly, as she drifts off to sleep.
His loving gaze never leaves her heavenly face.
Her in his arms, he will always keep.
When they are together, there is no need for haste.

He lets out a contented sigh,
she nuzzles into his chest,
then something she tries to hide,
she fails, although she tries her best.

But he knows her too well.
He knows these tremors are new.
He knows there is something he cannot tell.
So he just holds her until her shaking is through.

Suddenly she stops, her expression reveals pain.
He knows she needs him, so he stays
while her tears his shirt stain,
she never leaves his concerned gaze.

Finally she calms, her grimace fades.
"It's going to be okay," he whispers
while with her hair he plays.
"I've got you baby," he assures.

She looks at him and gives a faint smile.
She manages to utter "Thank you," her voice weak.
With nothing to say, they lay in silence a while.
It is too much for him to bear, a tear rolls down his cheek.

Darkness falls and out of the night
her fragile voice murmurs "It's going to be okay."
His eyes fill with admiration, his throat becomes tight.
Neither can fathom the others' strength.

Under the stars, on a blanket they lay.
Both glad to have found the other.
They need each others' company.
Not just friends, but truly, lovers.

this is my first draft... there will probably be edits to come

okay and it is very good btw ^_^

Seems so much like me....if only there was a "he" here...
Neat poem...

I liked it, and to be honest, wuz hawt. :3

You'r hot >>

nice revision ^_^

thanks ^_^ I spent most of my day doing it, I love fridays

Nice Poem.....that's all i can say really... ..to be honest I'm not really a guy who makes compliments so well.

haha, thx Car... like I said, this poem was more for me than anything else... I just decided to post it anyways...