Scars

I realized I wrote this right before I left for a week or so, and never got around to posting it, so here you go...

Scars

This was the first time she had slept in days.
Here, in his arms, she closed her eyes and drifted off.
He listened to her soft breathing as he felt her muscles relax,
he took her hand in his, running his fingers over her soft skin.
He winced as a scar passed under his touch,
he covered the white reminder of pains past.
He smiled for he thought, no more of those.
For here, in his arms, she would stay safe from harm.
"Forever babe," he whispered a promise into her ear.
She grinned as a tear rolled down her cheek.

awwww... so sweet...

Sweet poem...

thanks guys... yeah this is pretty much just me writing down a daydream... it doesn't quite flow like I want it to, I may rewrite it

I think it's a cute poem, but to be completely honest I didn't really like it. In general I don't like that particular type, but this one was rather unstructured compared to your others ones, like there isn't any flow at all.

I also have a thing about dialog. It's a personal pet peeve, but for some reason quotation marks in a poem instantly downgrade it to a lower quality because it just seems... unattractive.

It's nothing against you. though. ^^

I can take criticism Kristy, . I wouldn't post my work on here if I couldn't handle a little criticism. To be honest I'm not really proud of this poem, I think I may take the time to rewrite it in some sort of order, like I say, it was honestly just some thoughts I wanted to write down.

But yeah... I know it's not that great, but meh, not gonna cry over one bad poem.

Alrighty. But I really like your other ones.

Do you still want that library section, by the way? I never got your PM reply.

thx ^^ and yes... I must get around to writing a quick description for that...